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    Stand-Up: Vale in Motion

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    Stand-Up: Vale in Motion

    Post  It's Kruger on November 17th 2013, 7:20 pm

    Stand-Up #1

    The beginnings of my newest Stand-Up. I do these once a week at an open mic and I often record them. Any ones I put on Facebook will go here, I guess. I kinda ramble in this one, any reviews or advice or comments would be nice.

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    Re: Stand-Up: Vale in Motion

    Post  Shad0wChas3r on November 17th 2013, 8:07 pm

    I could figure out women, and TEACH it to men accurately and without offending ANYONE, before I can tell you anything about scientific notations.
    If only if only Razz .

    It was a little hard to hear you, but a good amount of it had me laughing. Also some of the pacing was a bit too fast, but all that aside, you've got some good, interesting material.

    Well done!


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    Post  Manny on November 20th 2013, 12:24 am

    Shad0wChas3r wrote:
    I could figure out women, and TEACH it to men accurately and without offending ANYONE, before I can tell you anything about scientific notations.
    If only if only Razz.

    It was a little hard to hear you, but a good amount of it had me laughing. Also some of the pacing was a bit too fast, but all that aside, you've got some good, interesting material.

    Well done!
    Lol, that part from Vale probably made me laugh the most.

    However, maybe include some absurd example to over exaggerate points? I'm not sure if that'd be funny, but that's for you to decide.

    For example, when you talk about that "corner" in your mind where traumatic memories should go, maybe include an example there?

    "Like walking in on my parents having sex/a threesome". It's something I noticed some comedians do.
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    Post  It's Kruger on November 20th 2013, 11:08 pm

    lol I don't curse or use over sexual terms in my Stand-Up. I like to keep it clean for the time being. But thanks for the advice.
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    Post  Manny on November 27th 2013, 12:24 am

    Kruger 2521 wrote:lol I don't curse or use over sexual terms in my Stand-Up. I like to keep it clean for the time being. But thanks for the advice.
    No problem. Oh and it was just an example. 

    You could use a non-sexual absurd example in your stand up, I was just using a sexual one to get the point across.
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    Re: Stand-Up: Vale in Motion

    Post  It's Kruger on April 11th 2015, 6:38 pm

    Bump Cool
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    Post  Shad0wChas3r on April 12th 2015, 9:21 pm

    Video is private mate.


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    Re: Stand-Up: Vale in Motion

    Post  It's Kruger on April 13th 2015, 6:15 am

    #Fix'd
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    Re: Stand-Up: Vale in Motion

    Post  Manny on April 13th 2015, 9:54 pm

    Why did the person filming make everything dark?

    We already know what you look like Vale.
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    Re: Stand-Up: Vale in Motion

    Post  Shad0wChas3r on April 13th 2015, 9:56 pm

    He placed his cellphone up and it fell over during recording Razz .


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    Re: Stand-Up: Vale in Motion

    Post  Manny on April 13th 2015, 9:58 pm

    Shad0wChas3r wrote:He placed his cellphone up and it fell over during recording Razz .
    NO!

    I read the description and just came back to delete the evidence of my ignorance.

    ...Let's pretend like this never happened.
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    Re: Stand-Up: Vale in Motion

    Post  It's Kruger on April 14th 2015, 4:42 pm

    Lawl Manny. Get reck't by my description.

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